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Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this

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There is no doubt that these days
news
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 can be broadcast even through social media, as the sources of sending
news
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 are not limited  to
TVs
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 and newspapers. So, all generations are interested in watching and reading the
news
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. The question is, can
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editors
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’ decisions be affected by different
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? Do
people
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 tend to know about and read more negative
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? And, how about positive
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?
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, should
editors
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 report more good
news
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 to the population? In
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 essay, I am going to discuss all these questions and draw a brief conclusion. Many
factors
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 can impact
editors
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’ decisions
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 as the cost of money for each piece of
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. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
people
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 often tend to give a bad impression of other famous
people
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.
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, they might attempt to pay huge money to the
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 editor to report a negative thing about  a person. So, the editor may accept
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 money, and she/he may even try to
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news
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 on the front page of the newspapers or social media.
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, another factor is teenagers might not be attracted by economic or political
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. The new generation is keen on knowing
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 about fashionistas or famous singers.
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, older
people
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 like to read and watch the
news
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 related to the economy and politics, and wars.
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,
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editors
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 are usually under pressure
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factors
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 related to customers.
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, in
this
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 present time,
people
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 always spend most of their time reading or watching bad
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 which they are used to seeing.
Although
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 negative
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 has a dangerous influence on
people
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’s moods, they tend to know about it
further
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. The main reason behind it is that most
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 are curious, as they become interested in knowing why
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 happened, who has a relation to
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 problem and other
such
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 questions. Here,
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editors
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 might be more active in reporting more bad
news
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, following the curiosity of
people
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, and responding to them.
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,
news
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editors
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 have to
also
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 focus on positive
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. They should  balance bad and good
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 in order to lead
people
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 to feel that the world is still safe
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 and that there are useful and helpful
people
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. In conclusion,
news
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editors
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 should be more aware of
factors
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 that may affect their decision.
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, they have to strike a balance between each type of
news
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 to attract more
people
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 and give a good impression of the world
while
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people
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 are still suffering from many issues.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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