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in the future all cars buses and tracks will be driverless . the only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disvantages?

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future all transportation will be driverless
due to
 the development of technologies. In my ,opinion
this
 change will take more perks to driver safety.
For instance
 , the large number of crashes and incidents on the road per year would suddenly decrease, thanks to the accuracy of the artificial system which is more precise and capable to focus on the street without any demand to take a rest
instead
 of human behaviour whose needs to avoid constantly distraction from outside
as well as
 human feeling
such
 as tiredness and anxiety . At the same ,time
this
 kind of transformation could have
also
 drawbacks concerning the economic side. The annual cost of the means could reach a high peak for the reason that to maintain a high quality that makes people safe needs to have a lot of inspections to avoid accidents.
Although
 the cost issue is an important thing to consider the benefits are more valid , in , the fact
this
 type of future could
also
 reduce the big amount of death by crashing cars,
therefore
, could improve the human lifestyle.
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