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Write about following topic: Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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in recent years,
children
 using free
time
 to do
school
work
 has become increasingly popular around the world, and some people argue that free
time
 should be used to do more
school
work
.
while
 I agree that
children
 should spend some free
time
 doing more
school
work
, I believe that the balance in using free
time
 should be considered. on the hand, the option to
children
 do more
school
work
 by using their free
time
 is attractive for several reasons. Many
students
 to
want
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towant
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 learn more knowledge when they have free
time
, in
this
 way, they can become smart, and they will be able to understand something before they go to class. in terms of their
study
 career,
students
 decide to use their free
time
 to
study
, rather than play video games. They will have the chance to achieve high scores when doing the exam.
this
 is may lead to a successful learning career.
on the other hand
, I believe that it is more beneficial for
students
 to enjoy their free
time
.
Firstly
, the
study
 is not the only thing they have learned.
for example
, it is impossible to become have more friends and learn some hobbies without having free
time
.
As a result
,
students
 planning their free
time
 can help their independence and organizing abilities.
secondly
, it can help
students
 become outgoing For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that
children
 are more likely to enjoy free
time
. because they are still young,
also
 they have to learn something more than
study
.
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