When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent you agree or disagree with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your argument with examples and relevant evidence.

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In our every ,day we can not live without

technology

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this

technology

has required for smooth work. Now we are passing

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modern era, which is executing a different type of outcome and

as well as

we are forgetting our ancient part of ability

this

is not the cost-effective and easiest way. In my point of view , we should not carry

this

previous system which is not given us

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way of working. In

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I will elaborate on why I disagree.

Firstly

, worldwide our daily costs are increasing for all parts of the stage. when we rise in the morning and go to bed at the night. If we do not care about our required terms we have options for some

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development for better performance and handy. For example, in the morning when we want to go for breakfast we took help from the bread toaster and

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tea from an electrical teapot. In the

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past we are depending on our mother and wife but

this

is now very easy for us. There is no require any human labour

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physical work. we can get all demand very short time.

Secondly

, in our medical sector required for technological changes

due to

the patient's disease are founding a lot. If we are not developing our medical

technology

then

it should not possible to make

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fight against diseases.

For instance

, we faced a very recent corona pandemic worldwide at the beaning our medical department can not take the initiative for

this

disease. After developing

this

vaccine for different variants people get immunity and protect

this

corona pedantic.

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, it is very essential for every time upgrading our

technology

basis on future vision.

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we will face a lot of hassle in every part of life.

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