The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart provides data on the percentage of 3 different groups of people who visit four places of interest in one northern country.

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cinema is the most popular zone to chill out among native Canadians and immigrants from English-speaking

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(70 per

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and almost 65 per

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respectively). More than half of all new migrants from other

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are fond of spending their time in the library.

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this

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place is not quite popular among citizens, the proportion

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for about one-third of the total. Probing

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, theatre is the least popular place. The percentage of Canadians, English immigrants and immigrants from the rest of the world make up only 20 per

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, about 25 per

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and one-tenth of the total respectively.

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, the cinema is the most popular place for locals and migrants from English-speaking

countries

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to spend their spare time,

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the library is in demand among foreigners from other

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some believe the primary purpose of museums is to entertain people, while others believe their purpose is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.