The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart provides data on the percentage of 3 different groups of people who visit four places of interest in one northern country.

It is clear that

cinema is the most popular zone to chill out among native Canadians and immigrants from English-speaking

countries

(70 per

cent

and almost 65 per

cent

respectively). More than half of all new migrants from other

countries

are fond of spending their time in the library.

However

this

place is not quite popular among citizens, the proportion

account

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for about one-third of the total. Probing

further

, theatre is the least popular place. The percentage of Canadians, English immigrants and immigrants from the rest of the world make up only 20 per

cent

, about 25 per

cent

and one-tenth of the total respectively.

Overall

, the cinema is the most popular place for locals and migrants from English-speaking

countries

to spend their spare time,

while

the library is in demand among foreigners from other

countries

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