Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The issue of taking part in dangerous
sport
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remains controversial. There is a number of
people
hold
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a claiming view that
its
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is their personal benefit to play any
sport
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activity.
However
, there are
people
having the opposite idea which is government should give an outright ban
to
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reckless
sports
.
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essay would analyse aspects of the problem. On the other side of the argument, there are several good points supporting the opinion saying that
people
have the rights to choose any
sports
they wish to. Most of those in
favor
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for
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this
viewpoint usually claim that regardless of the risks, playing extreme
sports
can help
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many skills. To be specific, by putting oneself into
dangerous
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situation, one’s potential will be developed and one is able to
pursuit
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such
desire.
For instance
, a kid inspired by
a
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pro racing
athletes
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will end up
fulfil
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his dream and
become
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a famous star in the future. On the
orther
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other
side of the fence, it cannot be denied that there are still other
people
hold
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an
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idea that dangerous
sports
should be banned by the government. And
oviously
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obviously
, their justification
seem
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convincing as well. For a start, it could be
agree
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that
people
taking in extreme
sports
have
high
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risk of injury. Many activities like skateboarding, surfing, racing, bull riding, etc
has
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effected
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individuals badly and
cause
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injuries like swallow muscles, sprains and strains.
Besides
,
this
opinion
appear
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reasonable
due to
the fact that doing risky
sports
can influence and damage
people
as well as
infrastructure. Thrill-seeking adrenaline junkies sometimes unpurposely hurt innocent bystanders which could lead to many unfortunate
cause
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.
Fromw
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what
have
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been discussed, from my perspective, I highly recommend
people
to play any
kinds
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of sport but with high
cautions
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and carefulness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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