We have too many choices in what extent do you agree or disagree?

We have too many choices in what extent do you agree or disagree? Plenty of research said that
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teenagers and adults have
any
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opportunities to contribute to their society.From my
perspective
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I agree with
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proposal.
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technologies and gadgets are progressing year by year. Absolutely,
this
condition leads to even more possibilities.
Such
as: If we choose a gadget
for instance
smartphone, we can use its applications for several useful purposes.
In addition
, we will read something, learn cookery or
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make something on the website.
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opportunities for children in my country, one of them is the attention of our president Sh.Mirziyoyev to the sector of education.In fact,the children of poor families,disabled ,
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families can
also
get higher education at the same time ,our head of state introduced the education loan for the children of families like the above, so it seems that now any child can be a student.
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considering the aforementioned points, since we have so many options,we should contribute to the development of our society as soon as possible. Mo'minova Jasmina
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