All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects better for children's future.

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Some people argue that
schools
should teach
children
skills
however
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, as for others having a variety of
subjects
is better for
children
's future. I strongly believe that
these
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both sides are beneficial for them. And attend to one course would be great. In the first place, it is right,
schools
should teach
children
skills
with a range of
subjects
to be well-informed, well-educated, and
also
well-independed
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well-independent
pupils. First and foremost,
schools
should provide students with extra activities, and courses
such
as English, math, and
also
physical activities.
Furthermore
, teachers should be
well-informed
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.
This
is because they teach
children
and they must be second parents
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pupils. What is more, parents want the best opportunities for their kids to be good-knowledgeable
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schools
.
Moreover
, they think that all of the
children
's
skills
and upbringing
is
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more
depend
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on teachers and
schools
.
On the other hand
, some parents think that having a variety of
subjects
is important for
children
's future. Of
course
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it is true.
This
is because nowadays all of the
subjects
depend on each
others
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to get into
universities
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for students.
Besides
, studying a range of sciences is beneficial and it can provide students with high-level knowledge.
Furthermore
, it might create
a
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different
kind
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kinds
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of jobs for them.
However
, at
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some people assume that study
centers
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should decrease
the
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unnecessary sciences.
This
is because they might be challenging for them.
Therefore
, it can develop their
skills
and would be perfect.
To sum up
,
personally
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I think
the
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both sides are good.
However
, studying
an
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one subject is more important for pupils.
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