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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009
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The bar chart presents information about
aid
 in
billion
dollars
 in six countries throughout 3 years. The USA saw the
bigest
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biggest
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 amount of
aid
 during the period in question.
This
 country shows slight
grows
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growth
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 from approximately 20
billion
dollars
 in 2008 to around 25
billion
dollars
 in 2010 with
small
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a small
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 dip to 20 in 2009.
Similarly
, the UK,
which
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started from almost 12
billion
dollars
 in 2008,
then
it
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declined to 10 in 2009 and
leter
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later
it
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rose to 13 in 2010.
In contrast
, Japan shows decreasing trends. It started from almost 12
billion
dollars
 in 2008
aid
 diminished to 11
billion
dollars
 in 2010 with
more
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a more
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 significant dip to 10 in 2009. It can
been
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be
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 seen that Germany experienced
steadily
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steady
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 growth from 10 to a little less than 15
billion
dollars
.
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and Sweden maintained the amount of
aid
 - around 8-9
billion
dollars
 with a little fluctuation in
the
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2009.
Overall
, the
changings
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changing
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 during the period in question were not
dramaticall
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dramatically
dramatic
. According to
graph
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the graph
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 the most significant amount of
aid
 shows the USA.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aid, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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