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Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

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A number of people think pupils should learn to give speeches and presentations in school. I believe
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 it is possibly wanted in order to improve children's confidence. What is more, they
also
 should be trained physically.
Initially
, from my point of view, the main place where kids learn to be confident and independent human beings is schools because there, they spend more time with their friends compared to the time they spend with their parents.
Moreover
,
this
 kind of duty makes them prepared for their entire life.
For example
, most of them probably will have to make plenty of presentations during their work life,
thus
, schools help them to gain experience and let them raise their career.
Furthermore
, I am inclined to believe that it should be the main place for them to develop their physical abilities
due to
 they go to school ages between 7 and 18 which is the most important age for their growth. Teachers have to teach them how to do sports so as to be fit and they should gain
this
 habit there.
In addition
, some lessons like physical education should be more like twice a week because a healthy brain is linked with a healthy body.
For instance
, as long as we do sport, our body gets more oxygen and that goes directly to our brain and affects our thinking mechanism. All in all, it seems to me that schools have a great number of duties
such
 as getting kids prepared for life and supporting their growth.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay presents a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the connection between your ideas could be strengthened. Include clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph, followed by explanations and examples that relate directly back to the topic sentences. This will enhance the logical flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
It is essential to maintain focus on the task prompts' questions throughout the essay. Make sure to address all parts of the question fully. In your essay, you did not explore the question of why teaching presentations is important in depth; similarly, the discussion of other skills to be taught was limited. Provide a more detailed examination of the reasons and a wider range of skills that could be included in a school curriculum, supporting each point with relevant examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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