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Despite the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry

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These days, despite the advances made in agriculture, many men and women around the world are still hungry. I will discuss these problems and give solutions in
this
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 article. The first and most important reason is that dividing
foods
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 is unfair around the world which means meal sellers prefer to sell to
countries
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 that have powerful economies
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 of poor
countries
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 because they can make more money.
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, the united states as a developed and wealthy country, buy the most percentage of all
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, so, reminds
foods
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 have been divided into other
countries
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.
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, other
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 can'
t
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 buy meals as much as the USA. The second reason is the
weather
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 conditions
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 as hot
weather
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.
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, in South Africa because of the hot
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, the farmers can'
t
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 grow a seed to produce other
foods
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.
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, the first solution is that the worldwide
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 association should devote a budget to supervise the
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 division.
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, if the
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 dividing is not fair, the association should help and give more money to poor
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 that can buy more
food
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 or they can make a new law to create a capacity for buying
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 for each country which means
countries
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 can'
t
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 buy
food
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 more than their capacities. The second reason is that if the
weather
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 is not suited for agriculture, we need help from technology.
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, if the farmer can'
t
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 grow a seed naturally, they can use technology to produce a seed artificially. In conclusion, the hungry problem is the most important issue that people are faced in recent years.
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, we need to find some solutions to solve
this
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 problem.
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