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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, there are a lot of
people
 who Studies abroad and have well-qualified degrees in
such
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 term as engineering and medicine. There are some occasions when
people
 want to stay or left
country
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the country
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 where they trained. Some
people
 believe that It is important to
work
 in
that
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the
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country
 where they were educated. Other
people
 think that there is nothing
deal
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 with that. On the one
hand
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people
 are
consumered
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consumers
consumed
 that place
where
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, where person had education program or internship,
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person
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a person
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 had education program or internship
playes
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plays
played
crucial
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 role in one's future. What's
more
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,more
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 It is regarded that
people
 should live and continue their working process in a
country
 they had trained. In the
fact
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 It will lead certain countries
for
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to
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 some economical changes.
For Instance
, On Condition that the
numbers
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 of
people
 who stayed will increase that would corresponding help
for
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developing
countries
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countries'
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 condition,
due to
number
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 of experts there.
On the other hand
, It goes
withoutn
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without
 saying that person is able to choose wherever place to have a job. As the world becomes more integrated the common need
of
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work
 is becoming more difficult.
This
 can be the reason why
people
 make
desisions
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decisions
 about
country
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the country
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 they
work
.
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in.
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However
, If there are no particular matters that enforce
someone
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someone's
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 reasons for it, they are still
tree
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free
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 to make their own choice. There are some
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 that confirm
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the facts
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facts
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fact
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 that
people
 all around the world are able to have a job in
country
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the country
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 they wish. In conclusion, both sides of
this
 essay should be examined carefully. In case
that
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It is opposite opinions and I suppose that I
far
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am far
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likely
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more likely
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 have the same view
with
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as
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 the second side because
of
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apply
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people
born
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are born
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 free and they are free in terms of their
work
 too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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