Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the modern days, Social
media
may be convenient but it has
also
resulted in some negative impacts.
This
essay will attempt to explain why I personally believe that social
media
has a negative effect on young
people
.
To begin
with, Heartless and vicious comments
in
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social
media
hurt young
people
and may cause mental diseases.
For example
, Twitter allows
people
to send
message
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messages
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freely even if the
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message
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messages
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to
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anyone and leave comments on
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contents
.
Although
service providers try to supervise posts, many
people
text
to
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someone aggressively and even threateningly.
This
could cause mental problems like depression
to
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young
people
.
Furthermore
, young
people
may think famous and popular influencer posts as correct information even if it is wrong.
Although
some young
people
rely on information in social
media
, It’s not that
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on social
media
are
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trustworthy
truth worthy
because of a lack of
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by experts. To illustrate, how-to videos on YouTube
contents
aren't necessarily true. Everyone can post on
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social
media
, but nobody
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the detail of the
contents
. If
people
attempt to learn something academic,
this
allows
people
to misunderstand easily.
Although
social
media
could be a useful tool for young
people
to communicate with others, the convenient tool has a negative effect on them
due to
harmful and inaccurate influences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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