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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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According to
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 the research most online
meetings
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 and
trainings
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training
pieces of training
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 these days are
conduced
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conducted
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in
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online. Online meeting saves
employees
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time
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 and money
however
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, lack of focus
between
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among
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 the workers during
the
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online meeting. In my
opinion
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 it brings more benefits than drawbacks.
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, online meeting saves travelling
time
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 and money. In traditional
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meetings
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 workers need to
travel
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other
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to other
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 states or countries to attend
meetings
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 and meet some
people
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 which means
people
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travel
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 a lot .
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, in my previous company
employees
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 need to
travel
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other
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counries
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countries
 to attend
meetings
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 and
trainings
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training
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 but now
meetings
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held
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are held
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in
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apply
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online which saves
lot
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a lot
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 of
time
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to
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for
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 the
employes
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employees
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.
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, online
meetings
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 are more economical than the traditional
one
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ones
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 which saves
travel
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 expenditure and
accomandation
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accommodation
 expenses.
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, one of the tech
giant
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google
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announce
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 they save $3 billion dollar from
the
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traditional
meetings
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.
However
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, Online
meeting
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meetings
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also
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have
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 some drawbacks.
Employees
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 who attend their online
meeting
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meetings
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 have
lack
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a lack
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 of focus during the meeting. when
people
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 attend their
meeting
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meetings
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through
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apply
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online are easily distracted
from
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by
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 the surrounding noise,
people
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 or whatever.
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, The
times
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 of
india
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India
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 reports
people
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 who attend their meeting
via
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online had
lack
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a lack
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of
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focus compare to
the
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traditional sessions because
,
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 Traditional sessions minimizes distraction because there is a direct interaction between
people
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.
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,
meetings
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 are disturbed
due to
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 technical
fault
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faults
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 or some network issues. In conclusion, despite
of
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some drawbacks online sessions are more
benificial
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beneficial
 than
the
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traditional meeting.its saves
lot
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a lot
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 of travelling
time
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 and money
to
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for
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 the
employees
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 and employers.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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