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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009
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The chart shows
aid
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to aid
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 in $
billion
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 from the US, Germany, the UK, Japan, the
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and Sweden from 2008 to 2009. In general, the US always contributed the highest
ampount
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amount
 of aid among other countries. It can be clearly seen that
he
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the
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 US spend more than 20
billion
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 in 2008.
However
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, the number
drop
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dropped
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 to nearly 20
billion
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 in the following year. In 2010, the aid paid by the US shows a significant rise of
amount
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the amount
an amount
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 to almost 25
billion
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. The least amount paid is from the Netherlands with less than 8
billion
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 in 2008. Germany, the UK and Japan spend
quite
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quite a
a quite
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 similar amount in 2008, which is not more than 15
billion
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.
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, Sweden follow the footsteps of the Netherlands where they only contributed less than 10
billion
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 in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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