Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
government
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and private organisations do more scientific
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to improve our
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. whether scientific
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should be carried out controlled by the
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or private are a big debate in recent years. I partially agree that both
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and private organisations do
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for better growth.
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,
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may reduce medicine costs to do
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in medical fields. If
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do more
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in the medical field, they provide quality and cost-efficient drugs to the public.
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, The Russian
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provides free medicine to their people because their
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should carry
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. Medical
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conducted by the
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is necessary to control by the authority
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because conducting a scientific investigation through the administration of a country would think as more reliable and ethical, compared to a private institution.
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, councils
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not think about the profit so they only conduct
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on the countries and people's growth.
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, every country's authorities invest more money to do
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in renewable sources which means they only care about their country's resources
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of making a profit.
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, in the
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20 ,years private
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organisations
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do more
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to survive and make a profit in
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competitive world. many companies need to build their brands, which means the organisation needs to improve their product quality and sell it
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a competitive price.
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, Tesla conducts more
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on their cars and provides more innovative things to their cars which built their brand image and market share.
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, private management gave more innovative products which changed our world.
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, In 2007, steve jobs introduced
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iphone
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iPhone
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a great breakthrough in the smart industry. In conclusion,
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do
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in some critical industries like the medical and energy industries, ,
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they should support private organisations to do their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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