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Competitive sports have been argued to have a positive effect on child education by some, while others oppose to To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people have considered that intensive
sports
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 are somehow adverse to the education of
children
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, but others don't think so. In my opinion, I permanently believe that the advantages of these
sports
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 for
children
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 are much greater than the disadvantages.
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, these
sports
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 can help to enhance
children
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's physique, nowadays many
children
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 become obese
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 their sedentary study style and the favour of eating junk foods, the trend has posed a serious threat to
children
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's health.
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, those
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 exercises can be a major method to keep
children
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's weight at a healthy level.
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, the exercises are
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 able to strengthen the capacity of the mind, which will be beneficial to kids' studies.
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, competitive
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 are capable of cultivating a dogged personality, I believe kids who possess
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 kind of character are more likely to succeed in learning because studying difficulties can be easier for them to surmount psychologically. Some parents who value textbook education believe that outdoor
sports
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 are detrimental to
children
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's learning enthusiasm, as in their view, those offspring who play on the field are usually not interested in textbooks. I would like to say it is a bias,
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 that many
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 who learn well
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 love team
sports
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. Teamwork is
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 an important skill which is not able to learn from textbooks. In conclusion, I insist on the view that the benefits of competitive
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 for our younger generations outweigh the drawbacks, because it not only improves their physical fitness
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 but
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 develops
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's teamwork and social skills.
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