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you live in a room in college. there is a problem in the bathroom that you would like it to be repaired. write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. in the letter describe the problem explain how the situation affects you suggest a time when repairman could visit

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter with regards to complain about a problem with the
geyser
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 in my bathroom. I am Mohan K and am a resident of room
No
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No.
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 108, Gandhi Block. As you might already be aware that there was a short-circuit in our hostel
last
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 week
, because
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. Because
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 of
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this
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this,
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 there was a voltage fluctuation in my bathroom
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, and
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 the
geyser
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 was damaged during
this
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 time.
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, I tried to manage not using the
geyser
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 for the past couple of days. It became impossible to handle the cold weather. As an undergraduate student, I have to attend early morning classes
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 because of
this
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 issue, I am forced to take an early morning cold bath
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, which
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affected
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has affected
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 me with the flu. I am undergoing medication for now, and the doctor has suggested not taking cold showers. I would request you consider
this
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 situation with urgency and support in getting the
geyser
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 repair done as swiftly as possible. The repairman can visit my dorm anytime on Saturday morning, as I am free and don't have to attend my part-time job as well. I am looking forward to your assistance in getting the issue resolved quickly. Yours faithfully Mohan K

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task response
State the problem clearly at the start and give a clear request for repair (and a time to visit).
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph about one main idea. Use simple links like First, Next, So, Because to show order.
greeting and closing
Polite tone with proper greeting and closing used.
coherence and cohesion
The letter shows how the issue affects daily life (cold bath, classes, illness).
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