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Nowadays more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development

#people #socialise #face #development
Nowadays majority
people
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 choose to socialise online rather than face to face.
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esse
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essay
 will discuss
about
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online rather.
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 majority
people
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 want and choose to socialise online rather. Positive
sideit
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 it is when you
very
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 busy or you gonna somewhere you can communicate with him or her. So now
this
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support
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 by
teenagers
 and government
supports
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too
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. Because we are living in
modern
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 world.
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 all countries already
supports
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this
 action because almost everything becomes online.
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, you need something about animals,foods or
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water
 and something about
news
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 you can
to
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take more information about
this
 . Now
very
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 useful way for
teenagers
this
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is
communicate
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to communicate
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from
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via
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telegram
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 or WhatsApp.
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, there is
also
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side
.
Majority
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teenagers
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of teenagers
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 use
internet
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the internet
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 for the bad.
Firstly
 they use
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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interne
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internet
.
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thet
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they
 simply spend time.
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 is
negative
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side
. They will simply spend more
megobytes
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megabytes
 for
this
 action and
this
so
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 bad.
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, parents must select
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone after 9 p.m o'clock and give it back morning
8.30
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 a.m parents must check often
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
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phones
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their
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 children. In
conclusion
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i
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I
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 believe that many
people
 choose to socialise online rather. As
i
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 listed above has a positive
side
 and has
negative
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side
. The positive is
choosen
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chosen
 because we are living in
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a moderen
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moderen
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modern
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amd
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and
 must use
when
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 we
need
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. The negative
side
 is
choosen
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chosen
 because many
people
 or
teenagers
 spend their time simply like that. That was
it
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 positive and negative
side
.
On
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 my mind spend your time
for
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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