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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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These days, the speed of change is astonishing. Some
people
 think that it's good to share
knowledge
 as much as possible in many various areas.
However
, others believe that some
information
 is too valuable to be shared freely. I will discuss these in
this
 article. The first advantage of sharing
information
 freely is that all men and women, whether poor or wealthy can access to it for improving their
knowledge
 to protect themselves.
For example
, if someone is injured on the road there didn't any access to a hospital, so they should treat themselves with first aid
knowledge
 that they had from free
information
 on the internet.
Furthermore
, knowing some
information
 is necessary. The second advantage of sharing info is that causes scientific'
knowledge
 will improve which cause to help
families'
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families
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 life.
For instance
, during Covid_19 time, all doctors from throughout the world gathered with each other and shared their advice with each other. So, they could find a solution and made vaccinate to survive girls and boys against that virus.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that some
information
 is too important to be shared freely because of some reasons like doctors used to study well to become a
doctor
 to earn money.
Moreover
, if
people
 gain
information
 on the internet,
instead
 of going to a
doctor
, they treat themselves at the home.
However
, it's good because it causes
people
 who have unnecessary sick like colds, to stay at home and treat themselves. So, it causes
people
 who have serious problems to go to a
doctor
 and are visited by a
doctor
 as soon as before. In conclusion, knowing some
information
 is necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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