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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

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shelter is an essential necessity for every life on Earth and humans are no exception to that. Contrary to other creatures who have no concept of paying
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 value for living, humans have different choices to make in order to spend
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 portion of their life in
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the well-facilitated
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 and
cozy
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 living
place
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. To do that, they can either
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 a home from scratch or rent one with monthly blows to their
overall
 earnings. In several countries,
however
, having a privately owned property for living is widely opted over living as a tenant in a rented building. Making an important choice like
this
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 legit reasons,
such
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; unlike a rented apartment, one
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 have to pay rental bills
at the end
 of each month,
instead
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 those savings can be used for improving the current quality of life in multiple ways.
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 to that, a private property owner has limitless freedom to reshape and modify any sections of his house,
for example
 painting
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 favourite wall with a trending design.
On the other hand
, specific restrictions and guidelines apply to a person living in a rented space which leads to less independence in personal home-decor choices.
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 that, investing in your home is like an asset for
future
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. The landlord of
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private property
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 a huge economic benefit,
such
 as the value of the land he owns
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 rising with
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 of time and it
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 as a financial beneficiary for the future.
Overall
, living in your own home has numerous personal and financial advantages which
outweighs
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 the lifestyle one would have in a rented house.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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