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The bar graph compares the percentage of university education among youths in six different countries between 2000 and 2007.

The bar graph compares the percentage of university education among youths in six different countries between 2000 and 2007.
The bar graph compares the percentage of
university
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education
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 among youths in six different countries between 2000 and 2007. From 2000 to 2007,
it is clear that
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 Italy, Britain,
Poland
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 and Finland saw their
education
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 rates increase,
while
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 Spain and Norway saw them decrease.
Poland
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 has seen the biggest rise in
education
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, becoming the country with the highest number of
university
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-educated people. Italy and
Poland
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 had the highest growth among the six countries. The proportion of Italians with a
university
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education
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 rose from around 38
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percent
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 to 52
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percent
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, the same as in
Poland
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, and from around 62
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percent
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 to 76
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percent
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. Finland's
university
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 undergraduates maintained the same level at 70
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percent
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 during the period. In Spain and Norway, fewer young people went to
university
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 in 2007 than in 2000,
according to
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 the par chart.In 2007,
Poland
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 had twice as many people in
education
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 as Spain
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It reached as high as 80
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percent
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. It can be seen that from 2000 to 2007,
Poland
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, Norway and Finland had the highest
university
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 attendance rates of all the six counties.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, education, poland, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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