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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects of this on society and families?

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Most
of
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the
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couples nowadays think a thousand
of
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times to have a
baby
 or not at the early
stage
 of their
life
while
 others think that they must take responsibility for having babies. As there are no
any
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reasons to deny that cost of living is very high and every individual thinks in advance to get a financially and mentally stable
life
.
In other words
, youngsters always have their goal in their 20s age that to work hard and save money for their babies so that they can fulfil their demands as they are still active enough.
However
, to have a kid in the early
stage
 of a couple's
life
 is a bit hard because it carries an abundance of responsibilities with it.
For instance
, women at
this
 era of
stage
 want to be
an
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independent in their
life
 and want to earn and get successful, having the
baby
 soon push them to sit at home and take care of the kids and can't cooperate with the work and get dependent on their husband and family again. No doubt, they
are
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also
 have numerous effects on society and families
also
. Many think that delaying the
baby
 in their later
stage
 will be high-risk pregnancies,
consequently
 gain more health issues.
In addition
, the most affected thing is it will create an age difference between both parents and child which may raise
into
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conflicts and separations. One clear example is,
due to
 upgraded technology in the fast passed environment it will become so difficult to keep updated with our kids and parents, and vice-versa. So, in order to overcome
this
 situation in the coming future it is crucial for
the
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couples to make decisions in a time period.
To conclude
, it is important to plan for the
baby
 by taking all the possibilities to happen in future
in
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whether to have a child early or later, so that no other problems will arise and go smoothly.
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