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Some people think that governments should be responsible for carrying out and controlling scientific research rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is sure that
science
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 plays a fundamental
role
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 in the country's development. There is a school of thought, arguing that the
government
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 is obliged to conduct and control scientific
research
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instead
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 of the private company. I disagree with
this
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 claim. Those people in
favor
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 of
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the government
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government
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 dominant
role
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 in scientific
research
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 consider the duty and power of authority.
Science
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 and technology are developing fast if a country wants to be economically strong
then
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 it must keep up with these developments. It is supported that
government
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 should take
their
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apply
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responsibility
in
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for
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 conducting scientific
research
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 and pioneering
in
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technological innovations in order to
thriving
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economy
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the economy
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 and society.
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 that,
science
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 is a complicated subject as it develops so quickly that constantly
need
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needs
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 new resources and stable
fundings
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funding
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. It is governments , raising money by taxing income, that have
adequate
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an adequate
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 and stable
budget
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budgets
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 that can support
long term
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 scientific
research
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.
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,
this
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 doesn’t mean that a vast majority of scientific activities should be controlled by governments without the participation of private
companies
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. It will put a heavy burden on
financial
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the financial
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 budget so that the
government
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 will have to cut down its investment
to
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in
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 other sectors
such
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 as education,
health
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and health
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 care, which may pose a negative effect on people’s living standards.
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 , private corporations with purposes of earning profit generally have sharp market insights and competitiveness that the administrations do not have. The competition between
companies
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serve
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 a useful function of accelerating the speed of technological innovations and leading them into
market
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the market
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 with lower prices, in order to benefit the people.
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 that, private
companies
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 are typically professional with
more
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the more
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 powerful
research
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team
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teams
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 and experts, offering technical assistance.
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, they tend to achieve a more significant result than the governments. In conclusion, despite the indispensable
role
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 of
the
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authority , l believe it is the private enterprise
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that take
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take
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 a leading part in scientific
research
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.
Government
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 should play an important
role
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 in encouraging and supporting
the
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apply
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companies
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 and
organization
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organizations
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on
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in
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the
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society to make a joint effort in
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developing
science
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 and technology.

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