Behavior in schools is getting worse. explain the causes of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

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an increasing number of more and more humans believe that behaviour in schools is getting worse. Many individuals hold different beliefs about it . Personally l definitely with the above-expressed statement and there are many compelling reasons to support my view. In
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l intend two solutions to
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. First and foremost, the main
cause
is
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behaviour in school is getting worse is
government
.
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is the reason, a lot of countriesʼ
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government
do not care
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kind of action . It is not important for
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. Yet , if
this
situation becomes widespread , it
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bad
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students
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life .
That is
to say,
as a
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teenagers do not want to respect their
teachers
.
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, in American education children do not have to respect their educationalists . After that, it caused
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.
That is
why ,
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should pay attention
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issue .
On the other hand
,
teachers
have some drawbacks.
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to say, they can not make a lesson interesting . It is
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important
cause
for youngsters.
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makes the child feel bored .
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a result , they do not want to respect educationalists and their subjects . In
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teachers
are guilty . Because they did not pay attention
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education method .
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teachers
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separate
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to pupils . By way of my conclusion, l once again reaffirm my position that
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and
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in
this
kind of state .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discipline
  • Respect for authority
  • Confrontational
  • Cyberbullying
  • Overcrowded
  • Curriculum
  • Engagement
  • Mental health
  • Parental involvement
  • Social-emotional learning (SEL)
  • Classroom management
  • Trusting environment
  • Anxiety
  • Stress
  • Behavioral intervention
  • Facilities
  • Resource allocation
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