The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the stages of produced
bricks
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for the buildings
constructing
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construction
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.
Overall
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, the process consists of 7 stages starting from digging the
clay
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and ending up with the delivery of
bricks
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to the consumers.
Firstly
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, the
clay
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is getting to the metal grid after which filtered
clay
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comes to the roller. After the roller, sand and water are added to the
clay
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, and
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this
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mixture goes to the mould or wire cutter for giving the raw
bricks
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a shape. The next stage is drying prepared raw
bricks
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in the oven within 24-48 hours. After drying is started the most crucial stage –
kiln
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the
bricks
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, within which the temperature is first mounted to 200-980 degrees of Celsius and is increased up to 1300 degrees of Celsius. When the
bricks
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were kilned, they are cooled in the cooling chamber, and
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, they have to package and can be delivered to the construction area.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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