Many people use social media on a regular basis in order to keep in touch ‎with the news and with other people. Do you think that the advantages of ‎this development outweigh the disadvantages?‎

Nowadays, the usage of social
media
to get to know the world and communication is considered highly increased than before. It is a trend which has to go in the near future.
However
, will it cause more trouble? In my opinion, even though relying on the internet will bring a huge change in modern society, the advantages are still much more than the disadvantages.
First,
it is obvious that social
media
brings more connections to people. It is easy to look for
old
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friend whose information has been lost for many years.
This
means that chances will come
together with
the challenges.
This
is because
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is the key to success, the more you can influence others, the more you can get. Obviously, social
media
is the most suitable platform for that. Without social
media
, it needs much more work to get in touch with someone, even strangers. So social
media
is a tool which can significantly influence the way people communicate. It is not
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personal
behavior
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. When one of a group of
person
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starts to use that, it is impossible to refuse it because you may be isolated by that.
However
, with the wide acceptance of social
media
, the problem
also
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out.
For example
, because information spreads widely and quickly, the public need to learn how to identify the truth of the news. For daily communication, there are always hundreds of unread messages on your phone, which is really annoying. You have to deal with extremely much more stuff at the same time and in a hurry. In conclusion, we have to accept it is meaningless to stop the step in using social
media
. Meanwhile, the information explosion is the problem accompanied by
online
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lifestyle. By adjusting our
reaction
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social
media
, and keeping a clear mind,
so
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we can make sure to use social
media
as
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in daily life.
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