The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below displays how
sugar
is manufactured from Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
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Overall
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this
linear process contains four main stages: farming, crushing, separating, and drying.
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The first step is
growing Linking Words
sugar
cane, and it takes about 12 to 18 months to become mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested either manually or mechanically. The manual method involves farmers removing the leaves first and Use synonyms
then
chopping the canes, Linking Words
while
the mechanized method uses machines to cut the canes directly.
The harvested canes are crushed in a special machine to extract the juice, which later on is purified by using a limestone filter. Linking Words
Next,
the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water and becomes syrup. The syrup is Linking Words
then
poured into a centrifuge where it is spun at high speed to separate the Linking Words
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crystals. Use synonyms
Finally
, the crystals are dried and cooled and the final product is Linking Words
sugar
.Use synonyms
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