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You met with an accident that damaged your car .you left the car at garage for repair but you are not happy with the car repair.write a letter to garage owner for the same. In your Letter Introduce yourself Describe what happened Say what you want the garage to fix now

#accident #car #garage #repair #owner
Dear
jone
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Jone
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, I am writing
this
 letter to express my disappointment with the
car
 service done by your team.
Myself
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I
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,
zarna
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zurna
 Dobariya,
I
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and I
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am regularly getting
car
 service from your garage .
On
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Last
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last
 Sunday,I met with an accident.
Hence
,my
car
 was completely messed
.
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up .
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Although
,my
car
 insurance is there ,
but
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 I choose to repair it from your garage because
of
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apply
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your services are good . Unfortunately,when I drove
car
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the car
a car
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to
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home ,
head lights
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headlights
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 were not working.
Moreover
, when I get
in to
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 the
car
 ,I need to lock the door manually as it was not fixed by
mechanics
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the mechanics
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.
Therefore
,I was very apprehensive
while
,
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I was on the way
to
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home because it was too dark and there were high chances of accidents. I am really desperate
with
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for
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 services from your garage. I want you to repair the complete damage done with no time,as I already wasted
my
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apply
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five days
in
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on
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 it. Looking forward to hearing from you,and I hope you
to
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take favourable
actions
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 soon. Regards Zarna Dobariya.
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