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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The tables illustrate the exchange
international
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of international
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 students from
Australia
 to
Europe
 and transferring students from
Europe
 to
Australia
 between 2007 and 2009.
Overall
, the number of
exchange
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student
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students
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 from universities in
Europe
 to
Australia
 increased in 2009
while
this
 rate maintains the same level from
Australia
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Australian
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 to
Europe
 universities in 2009 in total. In detail, Germany and Sweden had a significant enhance from
Europe
 to
Australia
 in 2009 and they reached 62 and 42 respectively
whereas
 the pupils of
united
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the united
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 kingdom(26) and France(60) decreased smoothly in
Australia
 in 2009.It can be shown that the only country which remained at the same number in both years was
Netherland
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Netherlands
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.
in
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 the following opposite of
previous
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the previous
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 table France boosted remarkably and
this
 country altered its
transferring
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 rate from 37 to 58 in 2009
and
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apply
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Besides
 Germany had a
severely
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 increase like the
last
 chart.
At
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 the end The United Kingdom, Sweden and
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 curbed their students from
Australia
 to
Europe
 to 23, 27 and 18 respectively in 2009
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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