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Some people think that computers and the Internet are important in children's study, but others think that students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #computers #internet #children #study #students #schools #teachers
The given graph compares the
population
size
,
birth
 and mortality rate of England and Wales over a
three hundred-year
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three-hundred-year
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 period between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
, the
population
size
 showed an upward
trend
,
whereas
 the
birth
 and death
rate
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rates
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 showed a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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trend
. The
birth
 and death rate followed a similar
trend
 over the
two hundred fifty-year
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two-hundred-fifty-year
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period
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periods
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 between 1700 and 1950. In 1700
birth
 and death rates stood at 27 and 30 per 1000 people respectively. And
then
 both of them rose considerably to 36 and 40 by 1750, after that they remained constant for fifty years until 1800. During the next one hundred years both of them dropped remarkably to 20 and 23.
Population
Correct article usage
The population
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size
trend
 started at 3 in 1700 and
then
 it had a gradual increase in people to 10 by 1750. In 1750 it stood at 10 for over
fifty-year
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a fifty-year
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 period until 1800. After that
population
size
 jumped remarkably to 35 by 1900. During the next one hundred years the
trend
 had a rapid rise to 50.
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