Some people believe that we have too many choices today. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

It is a fact that we are living in the twenty-first century where everything is technology based. So, it is undeniable to say that we are having limited choice lie in careers, education, and accommodation too
along with
this
I disagree with the statement because with increasing facilities the number of
people
is
also
rising day by day that reduced the opportunities for most of the folks with great competition. I will elaborate
further
in my essay below.
To begin
with, nowadays there are a variety of universities for scholars where they can study the subject of their own choice but unfortunately, seats are fewer as compared to students
along with
this
they
also
give tough competition to one another to pursue their studies in their desired system.
Although
universities provided plenty of courses, the number of students is all in a race to achieve their place first so the chances of getting admission
also
decreased.
Furthermore
the same happens for jobs the majority of the youth is graduated and have good qualifications
consequently
they are unable to get a job because they already have old employment and whenever they open seats for others only a few of them obtain that place
hence
all other left with a broken heart.
In addition
, we see the accommodations as most students and
people
leave their country, and hometown to make their future bright.
On the contrary
, as they moved
hence
the plethora of
people
migrated so chances become less, and most
people
struggle a lot and could not find a place to live first they move.
Besides
all
this
, they spent a lot of money to live there and found it hard and expensive too. So they were left with the least number of choices. In conclusion ,I am not in favour of
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Govenment
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should
pay
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attention towards
growth
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the growth
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system and
speread
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spread
awareness about the
situtation
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situation
otherwise
people
will face great
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and put
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impact on their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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