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Some people think that men and women have different natural abilities making them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a widespread belief that
men
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 and
women
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 have different features and possibilities related to types of
work
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. That’s why, some
people
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 are convinced that he or she has particular jobs and careers in which they have to
work
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. Other
people
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 argue that all variants of
work
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 are not dependent on the gender of
people
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. One part of society believes that
women
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 and
men
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 are totally different organisms.
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 is the reason why they don’t agree with the statement that all types of
work
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 are suitable for both
men
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 and
women
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. Because they used to think that man is stronger and physically better than
women
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.
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, they have the point of view that a woman suits to be a housewife, teacher, babysitter, and other professions connected with children and homework effort. It is a big problem, because of
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 way of thinking about the weakness of girls, a big number of
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 can not reach the peak of their careers.
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, in business organizations salary of
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 are much higher than
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, even though they have worked a similar quantity of time.
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 trends are popular in Japan, Russia, China, India, Egypt and others. Others tend to believe that the type of job does not depend on the gender of a person. Because
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women
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 have a logical mindset as
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 they can reach a higher degree of science or business than
men
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.
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 a point of view is popular among developed countries. I tend to believe that each type of performance is suitable for
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 and
women
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, based on their personal characteristics. In conclusion ,
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 the opinion of some ,
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 every man and woman has a plan of
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 which are suitable for them based on their gender. Others have the opposite opinions. I agree with the second viewpoint. Cause, job suitable or not depends on own features of the future employee.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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