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The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extent do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishments #offences
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In recent days, the
Government
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 set new rules to avoid
road
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accidents
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. Some people believe stricter punishments for driver offences are the only
way
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 to improve
road
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safety
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. I completely disagree with
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 statement. stricter punishment may reduce
road
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accidents
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 but it's not the only
way
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss how other effective ways like good infrastructure, regular
vehicle
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 maintenance and awareness improve
road
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safety
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.
Firstly
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, Good roads might avoid
road
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accidents
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. If the
government
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 provides infrastructure like good roads, traffic lights, and speed breakers in right place, there is a high chance to avoid
road
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accidents
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.
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,
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the
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UK authority well maintains their roads which reduce 20% of
road
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accidents
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 every year.
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, regular
vehicle
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 maintenance helps to avoid
road
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accidents
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. a person who drives a
vehicle
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 in the bad condition
face
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 difficulties during driving which may lead to severe
accidents
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. The
government
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 set regulations to check the
vehicle
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 condition every year might avoid
this
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 kind of
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accidents
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accident
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.
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, In India authorities should check the
vehicle
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 condition every year and provide an FC certificate, a person who drives a
vehicle
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 without an FC certificate should be punished.
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, the Administration set an awareness campaign about
road
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accident
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accidents
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for
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so
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people
may
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that may
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 give more responsibility
to
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for
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societies
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society
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. communities had a lack of awareness about
road
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safety
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.
Government
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 should advertise the importance of wearing helmets
as well as
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a seat belts
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a seat belt
seat belts
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 to the people.
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, In 2016, Bajaj company set
a
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up a
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campaign and they told how many bikers are dead on highways because of not following the
road
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 rules. In conclusion, punishment for
the
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apply
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driving offence is one of the
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way
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ways
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 to improve
road
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safety
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 but it's not the only
way
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. Authorities
also
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 take responsibility to improve
road
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safety
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.
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