The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how many
people
visited the National Gallery, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
and the British
museum
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from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
,
we
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it can be observed that over the years more and more
people
visited the National Gallery,
whereas
the
visitors
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number of visitors
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to the Victoria and Albert
Museum
and the British
museum
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Museum
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had a decrease from 2007 to 2010 and
then
they increased until 2012.
To begin
with, in 2007 around 6
millions
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million
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visitors
came to the National Gallery and there was a steady rise through the years reaching almost 16
millions
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million
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visitors
in 2012.
Moreover
, the
people
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number of people
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who went to
British
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the British
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museum
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Museum
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in 2007 were close to 12
millions
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. There was a sudden drop
to
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the number of
people
in 2008 reaching 6
millions
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million
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, which increased slowly until 2012 and reached around 14
millions
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million
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. Victoria and Albert
Museum
was
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the most popular in 2007 with close to 13
millions
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million
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persons who visited the
museum
followed by a significant decline between 2009 and 2010 with around
to
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6
millions
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million
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visitors
. After 2010 the number rise to 10
millions
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million
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visitors
in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, visitors, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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