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Science is very important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

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In the modern world,
science
 is very crucial in the 21st
century
. And it is very important for
students
 around the world. So, I think many nations need to focus on the knowledge of
science
 in the 21st
century
.
This
 essay will discuss important things of
science
 in the 21st
century
 to apply to teenagers.
Firstly
,
science
 can develop countries
such
 as
technology
 and innovation.
Secondly
,
science
 is very important for teenagers because
science
 is a basic acknowledgement of all subjects, so
students
 need to learn about
science
.
In addition
, in the present ,day
science
 is very increasing
such
 as the internet, medical
technology
 and others.
Therefore
, it is very important to teach
science
 to
students
 in the 21st
century
 because in the future
science
 will rise and
students
 need to paper and it is very important for the government to help them.
Moreover
, someone said that
science
 is the main subject that
students
 must learn and it is the background of the major there will study in the future.
In contrast
, someone believes
that is
 not important to study
science
 in the 21st
century
 because at present we have many subjects that it is very important for adults
such
 as
technology
, math and languages.
To sum up
, I totally agree that
science
 is very beneficial in the 21st
century
 because in now a day
science
 is very important in our lives and I believe that acknowledgement of many subjects comes from
science
 likes
technology
 and I
also
 think that which countries are good in
science
 that countries will develop.
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