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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through another media. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #newspapers #news #media
Although
 it is sometimes thought that the good
source
 of
news
are
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 reading
newspapers
, other
people
 believe that the focus should be on browsing the
media
. In my opinion, I consider that
people
 can get relevant
informations
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information
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 from
newspapers
. On the one hand, some
people
 argue that
newspapers
 are
best
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the best
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source
 to get
news
 and I agree. The first reason is that
people
 who want to read more about a particular
new
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news
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in depth
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in-depth
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then
 it is
correct
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the correct
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source
 for them. In today's newspaper, all
writer
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writers
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 write each and every
stories
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story
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arround
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around
 any
news
.
Furthermore
, individuals find all kinds of
news
 in one paper which is very beneficial for them.
For instance
,
people
 can find
news
 from local regions,
news
 from
international
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the international
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market
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markets
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, political
news
 and even job
realted
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related
post
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posts
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.
Moreover
, local businessmen
also
advert
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advertise
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there
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their
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product
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products
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 and services in
newspapers
.
Therefore
,
newsreader
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newsreaders
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 have a chance to work with them or to use their products.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that getting
news
 from
media
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the media
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are
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is
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better
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the better
a better
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 path
for
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to
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 getting
latest
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the latest
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information
. Nowadays there
are
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is
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 so many
media
source
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sources
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 available which are giving
latest
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the latest
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news
 from all over the world and the main benefits are that
people
 can get
news
 instantly. To illustrate
this
, today's folks have
mobile
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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 and there are lots of applications available inside which are giving all sorts of
information
.
For example
, Facebook, Instagram, YouTube and Twitter are
best
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the best
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 mediums for receiving the latest
information
.
Additionally
,
people
 can receive
information
 from anywhere and at any time. In conclusion,
while
people
 may vary in their opinion between newspaper and
media
, I think that newspaper is
great
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a great
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source
 of getting all kinds of
news
in
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at
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 a time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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