The table below shows how patients evaluated differnet services at three health centres.

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The table gives information about patients' assessment of several Longston

Centre

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, Peveril

Centre

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and Marchbank

Centre

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services

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, as can be seen from the given graph, the Peveril

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received the highest evaluation in comparison with the Longston

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, which was less assessed by sick people in several aspects of

services

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. With regard to the Longstone

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, it was assessed above 6 st Doctors' service and Care of children

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whereas

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the remaining three

services

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were not reliable for patients and got merely about 5.

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, the Mrchbank

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pointed more than 7 in Booking appointments, Doctors'

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and care for children meanwhile, the Pharmacy and Response to concerns were evaluated at 5.8 and 6.5, respectively. With respect to the Peveril

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, it took above 8

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the Booking appointment, doctors' service and the

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Response

to concerns

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;

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, care of children and Pharmacy could not reach that point and took just 7.5 and 6.3, respectively.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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