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some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are tge advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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In recent times, increasing the number of
people
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 who start a family
business
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. Some individuals believe
that is
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 the best way to reach success.
Therefore
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, In my opinion,doing family
business
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 have some merits, but there will
also
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 be some drawbacks and these are discussed in
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 essay.
To begin
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 with,One of the main advantages of the family
business
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 is all the assets and income go to the family of the person who runs the
business
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. Because
businesses
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 run with an outside partner,
people
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 need to share
business
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 profits with others.
Therefore
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people
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 can overcome
this
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 problem through the family
business
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. Another major benefit of the family
business
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 is trust in each other. To explain, members from the same family can trust easily because
people
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 who join the family
business
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 for the growth of their own family and all income going to them. So there is no need to cheat for the benefits.
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, these two are the main merits of having a family company.
On the other hand
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, there are some demerits for the family
business
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. One of them is the lack of funds. To explain,
people
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 start other
businesses
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 rather than family
businesses
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. There is a chance to get funds from outside,
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otherwise
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 the whole family find money to run the
business
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, which is the main demerit of the family
business
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. In conclusion, increasing the number of
the
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family
businesses
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,
while
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 there are some advantages and disadvantages to running a family
business
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. In my opinion, the main advantage is there is no need to share income with outsiders
however
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,the drawback is the lack of fund
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