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The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#spread #english #language
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language
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one of the essential problems of the world nowadays. We want to travel around the world , meet new
people
 and just enjoy
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 fear in a foreign country.
However
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language
 proficiency of many
people
do
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 not allow it. The most common and popular
language
 is
English
 now and it helps
the
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 large number of
people
 feel
themselves
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more
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 in other countries where they want to go
for
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 work, study or just move with family and live there. In spite of
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the
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everything
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 2 sides and
this
 common
language
 too. The advantages of the spread of
English
 as a global
language
 will continue to outweigh its disadvantages and I agree with
this
 view. In my
mind
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 the
advantages
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 of
English
 is it’s giving us more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 in all aspects of life. Because if we
have
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do have
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 not
same
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language
for
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communicate
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to
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with
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 each other we will not live more
comfortable
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like
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as
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 now. Or just remember
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how
the
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every
countries
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that build strong ties. Everyone
understand
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,
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 if countries could not get
each
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 other,
the
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friendly and diplomatic ties would be no connection between them.
However
 ,there are the disadvantages
such
 as
the
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difficulties in getting a job or
study
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studying
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 abroad. In my
opinion
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 the drawback of
English
 is
the
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fear. All time when we are interested in something like
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language
, books, sewing or cooking, we are starting to learn how to do it. But in
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case
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 where
the
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 large number of
people
 can speak
English
, the beginners may be afraid of pressure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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