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Surveys conducted in 1982 and 2002 show different pictures of what motivate students to choose a college or university in the U.K. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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These two pie charts illustrate the changes in various
factors
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 that affect students’ choices about a college or a university in the UK in 1982 and twenty
years
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 later.
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 suitable courses & degrees experienced a little decline in 20
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, it still was the major reason for people to choose a school in both
years
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. The biggest change in the influencing factor
was costs
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, which used to be the second most important motivation for students turned into the second least important factor in 2002. In 1980, the major motivations for students choosing a college were suitable courses & degrees, costs and the distance to
parental
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 home, which occupied 40%, 28% and 19% respectively.
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, all the proportions of these
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 decreased in 2002. The percentage of suitable courses and degrees declined by 6% reaching 34%, standing for the most important consideration
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 the consideration of costs fell by 23% accounting for 5% in 2002. Meanwhile, the proportion of location didn’t change too much only 3%.
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, the least significant
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 in 1980 were admission criteria, the reputation of the institution, and amenities, social activities & sports facilities, which respectively account for 3%, 5%, and 5%. Over 20
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, the consideration of admission criteria had decreased by 1% standing for the minimum proportion.
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 the other two
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 increased to a large extent. Reputation became the second important motivation consisting of 25% and amenities, social activities & sports facilities grew 13% occupying 18%.
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