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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Online shopping to the best of my knowledge has its own advantages
as well as
it's
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 disadvantages. Technology has taken over the whole world and almost everything now revolves around the internet which includes buying and selling,the ease
in
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 which people buy
things
 online and have those
things
 delivered to them with ease made most people prefer to buy their
things
 online.
However
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if
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of
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 the opinion that though there is
tremendous
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a tremendous
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 growth
of
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in
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 online stores,the
walk in
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 shops in towns and cities won't be closing anytime soon.
Firstly
 an average person might want to feel what he or she is buying before
it's
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 is paid for and delivered,I once had an awful experience in which I purchased a double drawn hair online from a popular vendor only to have
a
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synthetic hair delivered to me,the quality of the hair I got was nowhere close to what was advertised.
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 we have people of older age who are not very acquainted with the
internet
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,I believe they would
also
 prefer to have a
walk in
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 shop where they would get their
things
 with absolute ease. In
conclusion
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 I believe that
walk in
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 shops will always be I'm
co existence
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 with online shops because they both have various uses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
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