The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing

Online shopping to the best of my knowledge has its own advantages
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disadvantages. Technology has taken over the whole world and almost everything now revolves around the internet which includes buying and selling,the ease
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which people buy
things
online and have those
things
delivered to them with ease made most people prefer to buy their
things
online.
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the opinion that though there is
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growth
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online stores,the
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shops in towns and cities won't be closing anytime soon.
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an average person might want to feel what he or she is buying before
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is paid for and delivered,I once had an awful experience in which I purchased a double drawn hair online from a popular vendor only to have
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synthetic hair delivered to me,the quality of the hair I got was nowhere close to what was advertised.
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we have people of older age who are not very acquainted with the
internet
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,I believe they would
also
prefer to have a
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shop where they would get their
things
with absolute ease. In
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I believe that
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shops will always be I'm
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with online shops because they both have various uses.
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  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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