The pie charts below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets
The pie charts illustrate information on the
proportion
of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three
different diets. There are three
kinds of diets, namely Average diet
, Healthy diet
, and healthy diet
for sport.
The proportion
of carbohydrates in the three
types of diet
is different. The average diet
needs 40% which is lower than the healthy diet
with a proportion
of 50% and the healthy diet
for sport needs more than the two other diets, which are 60%.
The need for protein on average
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an average
the average
diet
is 40% which is the largest than the others. A healthy diet
needs 30% and healthy
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a healthy
diet
for sports is the lowest with 25% from 100%.
Fat proportion
is the lowest of the three
kinds of diet
. Average diet
and healthy diet
need 20%. A healthy diet
for sport just needs 15%.
Overall
, a Healthy diet
for sports needs the most Carbohydrates. The need for fat is the lowest of the three
kinds of diet
. Protein is needed more for the average diet
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