Many people believe that social networking websites such as facebook and instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's modern world, the internet has contributed the most to the way societies connect with each other.

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, some

people

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argue that the usage of Facebook and

Instagram

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could create a harmful impact towards individuals and society. I completely agree with

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idea since social media needs

people

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's private data and the possibility of creating social construction is big. In order to own an account, an individual must register their full name, date of birth, address, job, phone number, and so on which are categorized as private information. Even though they are being ensured that the data is only for requirements matter, the safety of each user is not guaranteed. Several harmful problems on

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platforms could easily caused,

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as data manipulation and cyber crimes.

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, a usual phenomenon in India is

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a hacker accesses someone's private account and

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intentionally leaks all the information.

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, despite several features that Facebook and

Instagram

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provide for success in social networking. Direct messages, posts, and comment sections are making

people

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easier to look up to other

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lives

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which may create a social misinterpretation.

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, we often see rich human beings showing off their glamorous

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Instagram

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, some

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who are living in the opposite status would believe that they are allowed to share their

lives

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Instagram

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only if they have fancy

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, to ensure the users' trust in social networking via Facebook and

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, they need to upgrade their safety policy,

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individuals should be more selective in consuming online content.

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