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Modern lifestyles are said to negatively affect our health, and most people are too busy to make time for their own health. However, some people argue that by making small changes to our daily routines, we can enjoy a happier, healthier way of life. Discuss both sides of the argument and state a viewpoint

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There has long been controversy about the ways our lives are unhealthy and
people
 have a myriad of views about the solution to
this
 situation.
Although
 there are good arguments in favour of changing our daily routines, I personally believe that there is nothing we can do to solve
this
 problem because the public cannot control their
time
. On one hand, altering our behaviours would make us healthier. To illustrate, the public has negative habits
such
 as watching TV until sleeping and tapping smartphones too much.
However
, they just need to reduce half of an hour spent on entertainment every day and use the
time
 on doing some exercises or going out for a run.
Besides
, the benefits of getting healthy,
this
 can
also
 make them have a good sleep and increase their work performance which is already proven by many experiments.
Therefore
, many
people
 think that their routines are the only thing that they have to reschedule. Despite the aforementioned benefits of changing our lifestyle, I still believe that there is simply nothing we can do about it. In the reality, many
people
's schedules are controlled by their companies or their boss.
For example
, many low-level employees are often being enforced to finish massive tasks within a short period. To save their jobs in the companies, they must spend their personal
time
 to achieve those orders in order to please their supervisors.
As a result
, many
people
 do not have extra
time
 to do any sports. In conclusion, under
this
 line of thinking,
although
 folks can improve their bodies' health by controlling their behaviours, I still believe that most
people
 are unable to control their personal
time
 to achieve that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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