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Some people think that theoretical subjects should be removed from universities. Do you agree with this opinion?

#people #subjects #universities
All
subjects
 which exist in universities are supposed to be beneficial in all aspects of
student's
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 life. Since practical
lessons
 are more enticing and tempting than
theoritical
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theoretical
 ones, some people claim that
students
 should be exempt from them. I partially agree with
this
 opinion and clarify some ideas which underpin my view. It is said that today in many universities
students
 are attracted by practical
lessons
such
 as computer programming or accounting,
while
 curriculums like physics and literature appear to be mundane and
occasionaly
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occasionally
 challenging. And practical
lessons
assumed
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 to be not only
stimulation
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 to socialize and exchange experiences
,
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 but
also
 advantageous to find
better
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a better
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job
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jobs
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, as many
students
 are demanded to brush up more on practical
lessons
 for the sake of their future
career
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.
Moreover
, some
theoritical
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theoretical
lessons
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 to be completely useless and extremely
time consuming
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, so it would be better if the number of
subjects
 like that diminished.
Therefore
, these are the reasons why loads of people thrive on practical
lessons
.
Nonetheless
,
benefits
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 of
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theoretical
subjects
 compensate for
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the advantages
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 of practical ones depending on
dedication
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the dedication
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 of time, effort and interest.
Due to
 the fact that numerous inventions are attributed to
theory
 and almost all breakthroughs in physics and science started as a
theory
 at first. Einstein's
theory
 of relativity or
theory
 of oxygen and flight are
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 in point. What is more, as it is obvious, nowadays some youth are busy with working on projects like creating robots,
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due to
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an adequate
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 source of knowledge.
This
 in turn means that physics, science or psychology will be one of the most essential
subjects
 even in the future.
To conclude
, today practical curriculums are in trend among
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students
, meaning that they are intensive and
all time
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 attractive
subjects
,
however
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 they can not outclass the importance of impractical
lessons
. So university
professions
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 should be moderate in teaching both of these
subjects
.
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