Some people believe that success is earning money. Others believe that success is defined by personal happiness. Discuss both sides and give your own opino

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believe earning
money
is
success
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but other
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psychologist
physiologist
stated
otherwise
.
However
most recent
study
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showed it can be both.
Thus
earning
money
and personal
happiness
may or
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may not fit
into the
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personal criteria
as
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for
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success
. Earning
money
helps
user
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the user
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to show off their talents to
others
causing them to feel less insecure, making their parents proud, buying expensive
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products
that'd both represent them and help them remain sane or sometimes it's just a hobby and got defined as
success
. Elon Musk is known for his
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corporation and
among
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other
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corporations
. His latest
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post
suggest
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that his main goal is making
money
which he uses to remain calm and sane like buying 50 cars, making his parents proud, showing off his talents to
others
and
make
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making
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more
money
. For
him
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money
is everything since the world revolves around
money
and
being
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capable of earning huge amounts of
money
itself is a
success
helping
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in helping
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him to
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survive
. During an interview conducted by Daniel, Elon Musk
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that he'd often
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show off
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his salary to
others
which
cause
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causes
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him to feel less
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and for him that's a major
success
.
Others celebrity
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Other celebrities
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such
as Johny Dep
also
believed
this
and strive
themself
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to be the best version gaining huge views just to earn
money
. They
also
believe earning
money
is another way of repaying their parents for all their
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hard work
making them proud. But other
celberity
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celebrity
like Amber Heard
have
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a
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apply
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diffrent
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different
criteria, believing that earning
money
is her hobby causing her to remain sane, helping her
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, and she
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a duty to use it to help her around. For her
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achieving
all of those things itself is a
success
. But
this
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doesn't
apply to everyone. Some people defined Personal
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since they believe life is all about enjoying it which would
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to
other aspect
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another aspect
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such
as making
money
. For
isntance
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instance
, Mr John despite only having a
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network
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income of 30$ per day he's shown to have a high amount of
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chlorophyll
, a chemical that can only be
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released
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when the user is experiencing personal
happiness
.
This
happiness
causes him to feel proud of himself, and
making
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his parent proud. For him that's
happiness
and by achieving it he'd gain motivation to do other things in life
such
as making
money
. There are other
cleberity
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celebrity
that believe the same thing
such
as Bruce River
although
he
have
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a
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apply
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diffrent
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different
criteria. He believes by being
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top it'd make himself be happy.
This
happiness
removes causes him to remain calm and would
be define
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as a
sucess
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success
since it helps him function.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Quality of life
  • Societal respect
  • Fulfillment
  • Mental well-being
  • Emotional well-being
  • Personal happiness
  • Strong relationships
  • Pursuing passions
  • Balanced life
  • Meaningful experiences
  • Holistic sense of accomplishment
  • Cultural perspectives
  • Communal well-being
  • Individual achievements
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