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The maps demonstrate the evolution, which took place in the coastal town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

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The maps demonstrate the evolution, which took place in the coastal town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1990, to the north of the seaside,
where
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was
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 enough
number of
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trees and individual
houses
. Next to
this
 was one skyscraper, with
small
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the small
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 railway station. The most noticeable is that all the trees west of
river
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the river
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 were chopped down, with all the
houses
 east of
skyscraper
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 were more replaced by more
skyscraper
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.
Moreover
,
a new skyscrapers
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 near the lake, and
airport
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 west of the river. But
in
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the
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15 years ago up of 7
houses
 were been 3 trees,
instead
 of
have
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already
been
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built the large supermarket with 4
houses
.
Additionally
, to the
north
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 the railway station was been based the factory
,
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 and
near
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seaside
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the seaside
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 was made the Ferry with car ways. Turning to
the
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2005, it can be seen that the railway station had all completed,
where
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 the car can drive past it
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