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The maps show the developments which have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps show the developments which have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps show the developments which have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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Overall
, a comparison of the two maps present significant changes from a largely rural to
mainly
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a mainly
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 urban landscape. In 1990, in the northern part of the
seaside
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,seaside
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 there were a large number of residential
area
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areas
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surrouded
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surrounded
 by trees and individual houses, but during the next 15
years
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 the town experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees on the south and east sides were cut down, with all the houses along the railway line being knocked down and replaced by buildings and
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a factory
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factory
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, with the lengthening of the railway length, a boat appeared, which is located on the southeastern part of the sea. Another change is the appearance of a supermarket
that is
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 located at the back of the buildings and we can
also
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 see that an additional road appeared in front of the store, which was not in 1990.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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