The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar graph compares
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export
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the export
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earnings of a
country
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in billions of
dollars
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from five different product categories in 2015 and 2016
while
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the table data outlines the percentage change in
export
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revenue
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in 2016 than that of the previous
year
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.
Overall
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, petroleum and engineered
products
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were the main
export
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revenue
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earners for
this
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country
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both in 2015 and 2016, and the
export
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amount increased in 2016 than the figure of previous years except for gems and
jewellery
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commodities. In
details
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, the
country
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earned approximately 220
billion
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dollars
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from its
export
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trades in 2015 which increased by around 10
billion
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dollars
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next
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the next
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year
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. In 2015,
earning
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earnings
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from petroleum
export
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was over 60
billion
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dollars
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, the highest amount,
while
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engineered goods brought
nearly
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58
billion
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, the second-highest. Next
year
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they made roughly 63 and 62
billion
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respectively.
Jewellery
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and agricultural
products
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consisted of 70
billion
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income
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in income
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in 2015
while
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the
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textile goods secured around 27
billion
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, which was the lowest. In 2016, the
country
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exported just over 30
billion
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dollar's textile and agro merchandises each, and nearly 40
billion
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dollar's
jewellery
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. Next
year
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, the
country
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gained more
export
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revenue
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except for
jewellery
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products
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,
revenue
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from which dropped by nearly 5%.
Besides
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, the
export
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of engineered goods soared by 8.5%
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the highest increase was for textile
products
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, over 15%.
Finally
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, it earned 3% and approximately 1% more from petroleum and agricultural
merchandises
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merchandise
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in 2016 than that
of
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in
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2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, country, dollars, revenue, year, products, jewellery, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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